Rping tips (Please add to)

[Wild one]

Her are some tips I came up with so please use them and what ever ones every one else puts-
Try to have more then two sentences those are arn't annoying.

Put "" around your characters words compare these-
Without: The mare trotted up to him hi! I'm Sarah, who are you?

With: The mare trotted up to him, "Hi! I'm Sarah, who are you?"

See much better now try to add detail-
The bay flaxen mare trotted up to him mane and tail bouncing around, "Hi! I'm Sarah, who are you?!" Her voice was filled with excitement and sounded like a foals.

Try not to use a name to much, it sounds better used less see-
To much-
Marina ran across the meadow hair flying backwards as her long legs stretched out far. Marina soon stopped by a rose and Marina picked it placing it in her hair before counting running home slowing to skip up her drive way before opening her house door and stepping inside.

Perfect-
Marina ran across the meadow hair flying backwards as her long leg stretched out far. She soon stopped by a rose and picked it placing it in her hair before counting running home slowing to skip up her drive way before opening her house door and stepping in.


That's all I got, sorry the examples are so horrible but hey I'm not writing a reply to a rp or a book.

Edit-
Try to always use perenfases or somemthing around occ chat in a rp topic.-
Without: Hey how about Amy tries to kill him but then they realize their siblings?
Amy walked along the dirt path quietly and secretly.

With:
(Hey how about Amy treis to kill him but then they realize their siblings?)
Amy walked along the dirt path quietly and secretly.

[Jay]

Use your punctuation. It helps. XD

Without: Wilbur sat down at the table face flushed Where have you been his mom asked suspiciously sliding a grilled cheese sandwich on to his plate

With: Wilbur sat down at the table, face flushed. "Where have you been?" his mom asked suspiciously, sliding a grilled cheese sandwich on to his plate.

[fluerdelis]

Use this format when making a bio~

Character Name:
Character Nickname:
Character Age:
Character Gender:
Character Species:
Character Sexuality:
Character Height:
Character Weight:
Character Appearance:
Character Markings:
Character Full Personality:
Character Likes:
Character Dislikes:
Character Hopes:
Character Fears:
Character Flaws:
Character Full History:
Father:
Mother:
Siblings:
Relationship status:
Offspring:
Other Relationships:
Theme Song: